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Topic
Do you think that it is desirable for stores stay open 24 hours a day?

Points Effect on workers Profit

I do not think that it is desirable for stores to stay open 24 hours a day.There are two main reasons to support my opinion.
First of all , working late at night is harmful for their health.However, there are a lot of workers who work at night these days.Although it is convenient for consumers,we should stop working around the crock for our safety working environment.
Another reason is that the Opening stores all the time needs a lot of money.The Employers have to pay high labor costs for employees who work after 10:00 PM.Moreover,there are little people going shopping at night.
For these reasons,I think that there is no need to stay open 24 hours a day.Working daytime is good effect on our health as well as company’s profit.