第4段落
The third reason is that, by studying humanities, we can become cultural people(←cultured peopleのミス).
We can easily be hired from corporations if we are cultural people.
That's because corporations want to hire those people, and cultural people often give their corporations the new way of thinking. This will contribute to their company's success.

第5段落
For these reasons, I believe that studying humanities must be important even in today's world.

まあ↑で文法ミスとか単語ミスとか色々やらかしてる箇所もいくつかあるけど、
この程度の平凡な英語が書ければ英検1級でも充分合格点が取れるようです。(ちなみにCSEスコアは747だった)


0040 名無しさん＠英語勉強中 (ｶﾞﾗﾌﾟｰ KK7e-xQOe) 2018/12/28 22:13:06

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素直ないい構成だと思う｡あの試験時間の括りの中で書いたにしては充分だろ｡そんでも6点は引かれんだな｡